Elemental Longing
Today
I felt the Wind
Filling my lungs with new breath
Reminding me of deserted time
Stirring a familiar Eros song
Today
I felt the Sun
Kissing my lips with courtly fire
Burning me to flushed ruddiness
Branding the mark of his presence
Today
I felt the Earth
Enfolding me in her abundance
Touching my ache with compassion
Infusing perfumes of mortality
Today
I felt the Rain
Chilling my skin with iced lingering
Waking me to gentle honesty
Bathing scars of pain and remorse
Today
I felt a longing
Overwhelming the stir of the Wind
Enhancing the burn of the Sun
Owning the touch of the Earth
Belittling the chill of the Rain
A longing beyond longing
posted by Theresa @ 6/24/2006 08:36:00 PM
17 Comments:
Hi,
Thanks for the comments on my site.
Your description is spot on.
And there is a lot more to tell.
I just read your poem. I think it could be an ecological anthem.
SM
T. What is "a longing beyond longing?" What kind of attribute is 'beyond' an element?
SM - The weather conditions were all over the place yesterday. Very inspiring.
Steve - I really can't say. I'll give you a hint though ... this isn't a poem about physics.
I know that, T,...and, it is another beuatiful poem...but, as I was reading it, looking at its structure, pursing through its images, for whatever meanings came to mind...I was going to ask you what element was your favorite...until, I read that there was a longing beyond longing that I had to know about.
Steve - I'm not trying to be difficult. I really CAN'T say. For now, it can be whatever you think it might be. What comes to mind?
*** It's also quite possible that I screwed it up and it's not saying what I want it to say.
Perhaps a "sacred" longing; one that asks for some sacrifice, where you give something of value, with no promise or guarantee that you would get anything in return. Maybe something as simple as a "shared silence" with the one you love. Where you don't talk, but you feel each other's presence.
I don't know...but that might be the only thing that could possibly supercede the greatness of all of these beautiful elements...it would have to something sublime: i.e., something real, but unthinkable and unimaginable.
What happened to Fire? Who fucking cares?! A very nice poem, my sweet! May you live twice as long.
Steve - In your usual fashion, you offer thoughtful and poignant sentiments to the discussion. Thank you.
Ron - I only want to live a long time if my friends are with me ... so back 'atcha, Babe!
Sun = Fire.
Hmmm, there seems to be a recurring theme lately.
Nice! Good work love.
I get this.
Sometimes it's that thing that reaches through you then pulls you inside out, towards it.
Theresa (and Steve),
This one is about physics...
http://donorbound.blogspot.com/2006/03/it.html
AC – As usual, you see what you want to see.
Andy – Thanks, Babe
Dick – Based on what I know of you, you would be attracted to the most feminine part of this piece.
Popeye – That’s a fantastic description.
Spin – Very nice … the eye of the beholder.
a longing beyond longing,
A secret that you really want to talk about but you can't, either because you'll hurt someone else or you'll ruin the excitement.
Uh huh, I hear ya. ;)
Michelle, either you're fishing or you want to tell me something.
Nah, just being a smart ass. Well, maybe a little fishing too.
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